I love surprise endings. When I found O. Henry's stories in 6th grade, I thought I was in heaven. I am headed over to read yours right now. Thanks for sharing!
Never mind my earlier comment about your story. I returned to the site and was able to make the print larger. I'm still getting used to how to use the keypad on my mac.
Sometimes I like surprise endings. It depends on how well it's done. I was raised by a woman who grew up on The Twilight Zone. Sometimes I see twists coming where they aren't.
I like your story, especially because at first it seemed like the so-called fortune teller was the one playing a trick on the man in the bar. And I liked the way you described things, too; I could definitely picture the scene in the bar.
Congrats on the publication! Ooh yes, I love twists. Hard to pull off though. You don't want it too arbitrary and random where it would be completely impossible for anyone to see it coming, but still surprising.
Susanna, thank you. Let me know the next time you have a contest on your blog and I'll participate (if I can think of something). I always enjoy reading pieces on your blog.
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Hi Theresa .. that was fun - oh oh why did the poor brolly lose her mistress ... that's not what red accoutrements should do, and the red handbag .. bet it was red too ... just hope the haggard man made the best of his twisted life ever after!
The reading was a bit twitchy to start with - but I think I got the hang of it ... at least I could read it! Very well done .. cheers Hilary
Ah, I love twists! :)
ReplyDeleteGlynis, me too!
DeleteCongrats, Theresa! That's awesome news.
ReplyDeleteNatalie, thank you!
DeleteI remember this story!! Awww wonderful! Huge congratulations Theresa! And I am LOVING your new look avatar! Yay! Take care
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Old Kitty, a few of you might remember it. The editor had didn't mind that the story had been previously posted on my blog. Thanks!
DeleteI love surprise endings. When I found O. Henry's stories in 6th grade, I thought I was in heaven. I am headed over to read yours right now. Thanks for sharing!
ReplyDeleteShelly, thanks for heading over to read it!
DeleteNicely done, Theresa! Dang...wish I had an umbrella like that. LOL
ReplyDeleteSA Laresen, I wish I had an umbrella like that too.
DeleteHi, Theresa, thanks for stopping by my new blog and commenting. Impressionism seems to be a favorite topic!
ReplyDeleteOn another note, I tried to read your story, but the print is too small. Is there a way to enlarge it? It really looks interesting.
Never mind my earlier comment about your story. I returned to the site and was able to make the print larger. I'm still getting used to how to use the keypad on my mac.
ReplyDeleteHumorous story, and I did like that ending!
Thank you, Elizabeth. I think the magazine's magnification is tricky. It was a problem for me too!
DeleteI love a surprise ending but am totally useless at thinking them up!
ReplyDeleteLinda, my writing brain doesn't work in certain instances either. If I plan to write a long manuscript, but there's no magic in it, I get stuck.
ReplyDeleteSometimes I like surprise endings. It depends on how well it's done. I was raised by a woman who grew up on The Twilight Zone. Sometimes I see twists coming where they aren't.
ReplyDeleteLiz, sometimes I see 'em coming too. I also grew up with someone who loved The Twilight Zone, so maybe there's something to that theory.
DeleteAwesome! I'll go check it out.
ReplyDeleteM Pax, thank you!
DeleteA fun story, well done!
ReplyDeleteAnnalisa, thank you so much!
DeleteI like your story, especially because at first it seemed like the so-called fortune teller was the one playing a trick on the man in the bar. And I liked the way you described things, too; I could definitely picture the scene in the bar.
ReplyDeleteNeurotic Workaholic, thank you. I tried to create atmosphere and surprise you. I'm glad I succeeded!
DeleteOoh, I'm off to read it.
ReplyDeleteVery interesting. A thief and a con woman with a magical umbrella. Hmm.
ReplyDeleteMichael, it had been a Magpie picture prompt I had done a long time ago.
DeleteSounds like fun! You've had such good success with shorts! :)
ReplyDeleteJemi, thanks. Now to get this big things published...
DeleteCongrats on the publication! Ooh yes, I love twists. Hard to pull off though. You don't want it too arbitrary and random where it would be completely impossible for anyone to see it coming, but still surprising.
ReplyDeleteNick, I agree. It's a balance.
DeleteOoh, Excellent, Theresa! I really enjoyed that! Very twisty :)
ReplyDeleteSusanna, thank you. Let me know the next time you have a contest on your blog and I'll participate (if I can think of something). I always enjoy reading pieces on your blog.
DeleteHi, Cool, really cool !
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Rajiv, thank you.
DeleteIf done well, I LOVE surprise endings!
ReplyDeleteOptimistic Existentialist, I agree. If done well...
DeleteCongratulations!
ReplyDeleteDeniz, thank you!
Deleteoh that is great, I did not expect that, I love the final image of the man floating away!
ReplyDeleteWords A Day, thank you. I wrote this way back when from a Magpie prompt.
DeleteHi Theresa .. that was fun - oh oh why did the poor brolly lose her mistress ... that's not what red accoutrements should do, and the red handbag .. bet it was red too ... just hope the haggard man made the best of his twisted life ever after!
ReplyDeleteThe reading was a bit twitchy to start with - but I think I got the hang of it ... at least I could read it! Very well done .. cheers Hilary
Hilary, I know, that magnification was tricky. Thanks for sticking with it! Cheers to you.
DeleteI'll check it out.
ReplyDeleteI adore surprise endings.
Medeia, thanks. Me too!
DeleteHi Theresa, many thanks for your comment on my blog post about Burj Al Arab.
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I love surprise endings, but not if they come out of nowhere. Congrats on getting your short story published. :-)
ReplyDeleteMisha, thank you. I appreciate it!
DeleteI remember this from a while back. It was from a prompt, right? I enjoyed it this time around too, love the twist. Congrats! :)
ReplyDeleteShelley, yes, it was recycled. The editor didn't mind. Thanks!
DeleteVery nice!! Great job, Theresa. Nice phrasings throughout, like the "stench of stale beer and desperation." :)
ReplyDeleteThanks, Carol. I like hearing what works.
DeleteI love surprise endings. I'll read your story! Look forward to it.
ReplyDeleteBack! Loved the ending. Good job, Theresa.
ReplyDeleteThanks, C. Lee! I appreciate receiving feedback from you.
DeleteYay Theresa! Congratulations!
ReplyDeleteNas, thank you!
DeleteNot only do I love the piece; you also gave me an idea about how to make some extra money. Congrats on having it published!
ReplyDeleteMissed Periods, you could totally pull off this second "job." Thanks!
DeleteCongrats Theresa! I love how youre getting your work out there. I'll check it out!
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Nutschell, thanks! I'm trying.
DeleteOh yes. I love finding out something I didn't expect! That's really fun, especially when I've been given hints all along and didn't pick up on them.
ReplyDeleteC Lee, I like when I've missed the hints too!
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